When I at last look into those deep eyes,
With years of bitter toil and strife behind,
Will it be worth my many anguished sighs?
What in those hidden depths will I then find?
If I look up and meet His glorious gaze
And find that He is looking here with grief,
My heart will stop, my mind be in a daze,
My beaten, battered beams collapse beneath.
But then, perchance, though chance be slight,
If I look up to meet those lovely eyes,
And find warm love from heaven's brilliant Light,
My weary heart will streak beyond the skies.
The joy! The hope! The latter is to be
My gracious, glorious, given destiny!
3 comments:
This poem is written in the form of English sonnet, which consists of three quatrains and a couplet, rhyming abab cdcd efef gg. I have now written several sonnets, but this is one of my favorites. Let me know if you have any thoughts about it!
So, as a sonnet I like it. It flows really nicely and the "story" it tells is gripping. However, I wonder if the theology is right. Is God really going to leave to the judgement for you to know if you are in or out of His grace and favor? I don't think so. Certainly there may be periods of doubt when darkness seems to prevail but I don't think there will be suspense as He opens the book and looks for our name. This may be the perspective of the lost but I think there will be an assurance for those who have been chosen to be His children.
Dad
Thanks Dad, and I must agree with you. Certainly we can know with assurance that we are under God's great favor and grace, both now and for all of eternity, provided that we trust in the righteousness of Christ alone. I can also see from the sonnet how it could look like I thought differently. So let me try to explain how the sonnet was intended to work:
The first quatrain stands as a summary of the next two, which all together were intended to build suspense by raising the question, "What will I find when I look into his eyes: grief or grace?" But this "doubt" was to be countered in the final couplet, where I tried to demonstrate assurance that I would find love in His eyes. Does that make sense, and sound more theologically correct?
Thanks again for your input. As always it is appreciated. Challenges me to deeper thinking about my own writing, which is a good habit for me to get into.
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