The storm had fallen fast and strong,
The waves had grown so high.
The boat was being blown along,
The end seemed to be nigh.
Then something dark upon the sea
I spied, then cried in fear.
The shadow that did frighten me—
It was a man, quite near.
And standing there on foaming walls,
I realized it was He.
The Savior looked my way and called:
“My child, come out to me.”
But stepping out, my foolish eyes
did see the waves and fear.
No courage counted after I—
I saw those waves so near.
My feet were sinking, down and deep.
I cried, “Lord, save me now!”
He smiled and set me on my feet, said,
“O faithless one, why doubt?”
I learned a thing from that short phrase
And from my foolish sin:
For every look at tossing waves,
Take two more looks at Him.
3 comments:
Great poem Sam. I've always struggled with writing poetry. It always comes out sounding like Dr. Seuss with kind of a "sing-song" silly sound to it. Yours was much better. Good conclusion and application as well.
Stay focused son.
Dad
Sam,
great poem. Like your dad said, good conclusion and application. I enjoy the fact that it seems to obviously have a personal touch, yet also written in such a way that all of us can relate to. I believe that is what makes poetry so appealing. My only critique would be to remain consistent when referencing our Lord. What I mean is stay consistent in capitalizing His name. I believe in the third stanza, there is a reference to Him and in this instance it was not capitalized. I don't think this is a big deal, just something I always try and work on with myself. God Bless you and your work Sam.
Soli Deo Gloria
William <><
Thanks. This one was a frequently-revised poem :) That ENGL 102 course I took was definitely a help in learning how poetry ought to sound.
Thanks so much for the feedback!
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